Fan Ziruo's favorability rating suddenly jumped from 45 to 65 as she became excited, and then dropped back to 52 as her mood calmed down.
"Young Master He, after reading it, do you have any suggestions for my novel?"
Fan Ziruo sat and spoke as before, but this time He Yunxiao could detect a hint of expectation in her tone.
Any advice? I suggest you don't write novels.
He Yunxiao carefully considered his words, trying to figure out how to point out the problems in Fan Ziruo's novel without hurting her enthusiasm for writing.
"I think the biggest problem with your novel... uh... is you... you actually..."
You're actually not a good storyteller.
He Yunxiao wanted to say that, but looking into Fan Ziruo's bright and beautiful eyes, he couldn't bring himself to say such heartless words.
Well, since I'm here to gain favor anyway, I'll just help her with "writing novels".
He Yunxiao finally said, "The biggest problem with your novel is that you actually lack experience."
Fan Ziru asked doubtfully, "Lack of experience?"
"Hmm." This time, He Yunxiao was really talking about his professional field. He spoke eloquently, "In martial arts novels, the protagonist often has to camp in the wild. If the girl has never caught a chicken or killed a rabbit, how can she describe the scene of the protagonist hunting for food?"
"Similarly. Even if a girl doesn't know any martial arts, although she can read martial arts manuals and imagine fighting scenes, what she writes in this way often lacks crucial details, making the whole scene seem unrealistic."
"For example, here."
He Yunxiao spread out the manuscript for Fan Ziruo to see.
"Did you notice anything amiss during this fight scene?"
Fan Ziruo looked at the plot she had originally written again, and after careful consideration, she did not find anything wrong with it.
"I don't see anything wrong with it."
He Yunxiao said softly, "Zi Ruo."
Fan Ziruo's favorability rating has increased from 52 to 51.
Fan Ziruo disliked being addressed so intimately by outsiders. She frowned slightly and shifted her gaze from the novel on the table to He Yunxiao.
However, what she saw was a fist hurtling towards her!
That punch was incredibly powerful and fast!
Almost instantly, it transformed from a small ball into a colossal object that filled the entire field of vision.
Fan Ziruo was stunned, and the fist stopped an inch in front of her.
The wind generated by the whistling fist continued forward even after the fist stopped, brushing against Fan Ziruo's face and gently lifting the hair behind her.
"So? Did you find anything wrong with what you wrote?"
He Yunxiao withdrew his fist and asked with a smile.
Fan Ziru was speechless for a moment, pondered for a while, and then suddenly realized.
"When masters clash, they don't care about the flowers and plants!"
He Yunxiao, disguised as an old scholar with a long beard, stroked his non-existent beard while imitating the old man's voice, saying, "That's right, that's right."
Fan Ziruo's favorability rating has increased from 51 to 55.
"Hmm."
Fan Da Mei Nu was amused by He Yunxiao's actions, laughing so hard that she bent over slightly and had to support herself on the table with one hand. Her big eyes curved into crescents, and her other hand covered the corners of her mouth.
Seeing Fan Ziruo happy, He Yunxiao felt happy too, and then pretended to suddenly realize something, saying, "I know why you don't like to smile, Miss."
Fan Ziruo asked in confusion, "Why?"
"Because the girl is a kind person."
"Why do I not smile often just because I am a kind person?"
“If a girl smiles often and others see it, letting them know that they can never compare to her, it will only increase jealousy and resentment in the world.”
Fan Ziruo's favorability rating has increased from 55 to 56.
Holy crap, a higher favorability rating really makes a difference. Before, when her favorability was low, praising her would only lower it. Now it's finally on the right track and starting to rise!
Fan Ziru smiled, not really caring about He Yunxiao praising her.
She doesn't value external things; instead, she values inner satisfaction more.
"Young Master He, please continue teaching me martial arts."
He Yunxiao was naturally happy to agree. He said with some emotion, "There are many reasons for a person to practice martial arts: to improve their health, to join the army, or to establish their own school. However, this is the first time I've heard of someone practicing martial arts to write novels."
Fan Ziruo said earnestly, "It was Young Master who said, 'No investigation, no right to speak.'"
Although He Yunxiao said these words himself, he was quite embarrassed at the moment, "I can't do everything myself, can I?"
Fan Ziruo reached behind her back to gather her long, flowing hair, preparing to learn martial arts.
Why can't we do everything ourselves?
He Yunxiao didn't know how to explain it to her.
When you write about the female protagonist getting pregnant, do you also want to give birth yourself to see what it feels like?
hiss……
It seems that it's not impossible?
Fan Ziru quickly tied her hair up and made sure it was neatly coiled on her head.
She stood in the middle of the study, assuming the posture He Yunxiao had taught her yesterday.
He Yunxiao stood aside and said, "Try practicing what I taught you yesterday."
Fan Ziruo hummed in agreement, then earnestly repeated the posture He Yunxiao had taught her yesterday.
Despite Fan Ziruo's gentle and delicate appearance, He Yunxiao was surprised to find that she actually did a pretty good job of reproducing the posture taught yesterday.
Special skill: Learning
She truly is a girl who excels at learning!
No wonder she could fall asleep while reading and still become a "first-rate female scholar".
He Yunxiao didn't teach much yesterday, so Fan Ziruo repeated each posture one by one and finished quickly.
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